People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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days, some groups of
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believe that they must be able to maintain all
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income money for them and avoid any
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payment for the nation.
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essay will totally disagree with
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statement for many reasons,
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consider
the two primary reasons which are the
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used
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tax
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for infrastructure
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improvement
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and public
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transportation
development. The first major reason
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should
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to pay
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for
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improve
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infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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in the country. Most of the authrities in
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this
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money to build modern
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with
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efficient facilities
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large companies that increase
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income and improve
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economical
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status
for
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the state.
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, can spend
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for
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build
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qualified hospitals with special technology that can provide
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effective
services for the patients to enhance treatment outcomes.
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, in 2010, a study conducted at King Abdulaziz University in Jeddah
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convert the
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payment from
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to develop Jeddah city the result showed
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60% was improving in the city.
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, the second primary reason
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taking
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from
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to
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increase
construction
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of public transport ways. One of the
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challenges facing the
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in Saudi Arabia
to
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takcle
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tackle
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the traffic
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problems, because of that the
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authorities
in the nation established new transportation methods like metroos, trains and buses can lead to facilitate
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moved
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around the country.
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in Makkah, the
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implement
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new
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tarin station that
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people
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transfer from Makkah to Madinah
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within
2 hours. In conclusion, I believe very
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government
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the government
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take
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tax
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form
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from
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people
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to
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them
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building an incredible city.
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coherence cohesion
Strengthen the logical flow of ideas by using linking words and phrases more effectively.
task achievement
Ensure that the main points are fully developed and supported with sufficient evidence and examples.
task achievement
The essay provides relevant examples to support the arguments, such as the public transport development in Saudi Arabia.
coherence cohesion
The essay effectively includes an introduction and conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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