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As Earth runs out of natural resources, we have started to look to space for solutions. However, some people argue that this is the wrong thing to do, and instead, we should look for alternative solutions here on Earth. To what extent do you agree with them? What alternatives might there be to exploiting space for natural resources? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People are split in different ways regarding seeking alternatives to solve the issues of limited natural
resources
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 on Earth.
While
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 one argues that space may give solutions for humans, others claim that we should remain looking for an alternative way on our own planets to escape from the problem.
This
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 essay will stand for the latter view and explain it
further
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. In the first stage, we have to realize that humans, like other species on Earth, are nothing beneath nature. So, we should treat the environment properly and not be greedy to exploit them. If we thought that our natural
resources
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 were running out, it is not caused by the narrow
resources
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 of nature.
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, it is just because we consume too much
energy
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.
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, the lack of fossil fuel can not be replaced by anything even if humans have been through space voyages trying to find the same stuff.
As
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a
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apply
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return, to solve the scarcity of
energy
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, people should be more clever and wise in managing
resources
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 provided by nature.
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, using renewable
energy
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 like the solar system or electricity may be more beneficial for our environment than holding onto fossil fuel to drive vehicles
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 as cars, buses, trains, ships, or even planes. By doing so, we need
no exploiting
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not only exploit
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 space to finish global issues, but
also
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 save our planets for the next generations. In conclusion, it is commonly acceptable that we are facing big issues like the lack of natural
resources
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 to
fulfill
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 the needs of our households
as well as
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 transportation.
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 of addressing solutions by finding out and occupying other planets, we should be able to invent the smart way, one of which is to stop relying on natural
resources
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 and shift to renewable
energy
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.

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The essay could include more relevant and specific examples to strengthen the argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the transition between ideas is smooth, providing clearer connections between paragraphs.
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Work on extending the discussion of alternative solutions with specific instances or data.
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Consider elaborating on the reasons why it's important to find solutions on Earth rather than in space.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a solid framework for the discussion.
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The response is relevant to the prompt and covers both perspectives, demonstrating a balanced approach.
coherence cohesion
Main points are logically organized and easy to follow, which aids in understanding.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • sustainability
  • circular economy
  • recycling
  • waste management
  • resource-intensive
  • environmental regulations
  • corporate responsibility
  • global cooperation
  • resource scarcity
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