"Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion."
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believe
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industries and
profession
need to be Fix the agreement mistake
professions
work
in Wrong verb form
worked
own
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their own
country
. Others amount Use synonyms
people
view that, they have to provide Use synonyms
allowess
anywhere for work.
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allows
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think thatUse synonyms
,
government invest a lot of money for education Remove the comma
apply
purpose
. so, the Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
industrials
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industrial
people
should Use synonyms
to
provide services for Change the verb form
apply
own
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their own
country
because can't get Use synonyms
good
quality education Add an article
a good
with
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at
low
cost. If they Correct article usage
a low
move
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another
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to another
country
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then
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low
those Correct word choice
apply
area
have seen Change the determiner
areas
people
sortage and lower income Use synonyms
human
suffer with it. Fix the agreement mistake
humans
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, Doctors like to Linking Words
move
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aboard
, so Correct your spelling
abroad
hospital
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hospitals
faced
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face
doctors shortage
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doctor shortages
for
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apply
that
lower income forcelys go Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
private Change preposition
to
hospital
which Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
was
more expensive Wrong verb form
are
fore
them. Correct your spelling
for
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move
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then
our Linking Words
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country
innovation can't Change noun form
country's
growth
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grow
with
a good way.
like, Engineers are one of Change preposition
in
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country
high demand Correct article usage
the country
skill
, they provide not only good innovation but Fix the agreement mistake
skills
also
help Linking Words
for
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to
improve
that Change the verb form
improving
contry
. For Correct your spelling
country
instant
, Family and friends Replace the word
instance
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also
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are also
feel
ill Correct subject-verb agreement
feels
they
will come for Correct pronoun usage
apply
checkup
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a checkup
to
his relative.
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with
On the other hand
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people
have Use synonyms
own
free wheel If they want to Correct pronoun usage
their own
move
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whether
countries they can. For moving Change preposition
to
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to other
other
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another country
other countries
country
they can generate good experience. example, They can work with top Use synonyms
industrials
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industrial
people
that bring them Use synonyms
a
good and effective help for their career. Correct article usage
apply
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life
they like to Change preposition
of life
move
there.Use synonyms
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The use of specific examples, such as the impact of professionals moving abroad on local communities, adds depth to your argument.
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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