Environmental issues such as climate change have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.
Governments
have been too weak to the environmental criminals these days, resulting in the increase of problems Use synonyms
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as climate change. I think the Linking Words
governments
should tighten the regulations and the punishments to scare them.
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For instance
, there are many illegal miners that still exist in my Linking Words
company
's mine pits. The problem is they practically use the wrong method to extract the resources, with dangerous chemicals Use synonyms
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as formalin that need proper measurement. Linking Words
This
issue can cause river pollution, which comes from the poisonous waste produced by the illegal miners. As a Linking Words
company
, we can only rely on the government to punish them because when it already affects the environment, it becomes the international responsibility.
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On the other hand
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done by us, the society and the Linking Words
company
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governments
may just make strict regulations to control them Use synonyms
while
the people who feel the effect should participate as well. But when the offenders become too wild and brave, the Linking Words
governments
should give harsh punishment to make them deterrents. My Use synonyms
company
have done many actions to make them stop, like giving many compensation, providing them with a living place, and even recruiting them as our employees. But in reality, it does not come as easy as that.
In summary, I believe the Use synonyms
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have the biggest influence on fighting environmental problems but as a community, we should Use synonyms
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realise and do something to overcome it. Together we can minimize the issues beyond climate change in the future.Linking Words
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