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In your opinion, what is the most important characteristics (for example, honesty, intelligence and a sense of humor) that a person should have to be successful in life? Use specific reasons and examples from your experience to explain your answer.

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Some individuals tend towards the viewpoint that to be successful, we have a number of personalities in
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, honesty, intellect,and
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a sense
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 of humour. I would have to support the idea that
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 have necessary characteristics
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 as intelligence and determination to hard work.
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the above argument about intelligence before reaching any staunch conclusion. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that the 20th century is an era of scientific revolutions and knowledge is key to success in
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 era.
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 means that fortunate
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 equal to educated
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. Another reason can be that education gives individuals knowledge and skills. One of the main reasons can be that schools aim to teach young
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 moral values
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 tolerance and sharing. It means that to be a good personality, you must first be a good person.
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, some individuals have
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 opinion consideration that another way to be successful is to work hard. So that one can get many successes in business
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 by working hard.
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people
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 become specialised in their fields, as well. In my opinion, I believe that qualifications gained can open the door to better job opportunities. It is accepted by a mass of
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 that their salaries gradually increase.
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, in turn, provides us with a comfortable
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. In conclusion, if we sum up all ideas it is obvious that in order to succeed in
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, you need to work hard
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 to being an educated person.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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