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Sometimes, companies choose people based on their personality rather than skill set. Why do you think that is the case? What do you think is more important – personality or skills?

Nowadays,
companies
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 use different criteria when choosing new employees, and in some
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 they prefer
personality
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 over
skills
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.
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 choice is often made because
personality
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 plays an important role in teamwork and communication in the workplace. Many employers believe that a person with a good attitude can adapt more easily and work better with others. One reason why
companies
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 focus on
personality
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 is that most jobs require cooperation and social interaction.
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, an employee who is friendly, motivated, and open-minded can communicate well with colleagues and customers, which can improve the
overall
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 working environment. Even if
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 person does not have strong
skills
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 at the beginning,
skills
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 can often be learned through training and experience.
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,
companies
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 may choose
personality
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 because it helps create a positive and productive atmosphere at work.
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,
skills
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 are
also
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 extremely important and cannot be ignored. In many professions,
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 as medicine, engineering, or finance, employees need specific knowledge and technical abilities to perform their tasks correctly.
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, a doctor without the necessary
skills
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 could make serious mistakes that put people’s lives at risk. In these cases,
personality
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 alone is not enough to ensure good performance.
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,
while
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personality
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 is valuable,
skills
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 remain essential in many jobs. In conclusion,
companies
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 may choose
personality
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 because it improves communication and teamwork, but I believe that
skills
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 are more important in most professions. In the future, employers should try to find a balance between strong
skills
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 and a positive
personality
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 in order to build successful teams

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Task response
Say your view in the first line and keep to it.
Task response
Pick two or three big ideas and back them with simple facts or ideas.
Coherence
Use easy words to link ideas, like also, but, for example.
Coherence
Make clear paragraphs: one main idea per block with a front sentence.
Task response
Finish with a short restate of your view.
Idea
Clear view on the topic and a good set of ideas.
Examples
Use of real life words like doctor, engineer to show skill need.
Structure
Good link words that help flow from idea to idea.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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