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Band 7.5

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part-time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter explain why you want to reduce your working hours say which hours you would like to work discuss how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

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My name is Ridhu, currently employed as a full-time worker in your company. I am writing to request you to give me permission to
work
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 for Part-time only. The reason is that I have selected a full-time
course
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 which is Business Management. All of my classes will be held offline and every week, four days attendance is compulsory. Because of
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 reason, I have to make
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 decision to give part-time availability. The days that I can
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 are Wednesdays and Thursdays from 4pm to 9 pm. Fortunately, I am fully available on Saturdays and Sundays which would be not a problem for me .
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, I will inform you about the days if I get off from school so that I can join for that day. As you know, before starting
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 at your company, I mentioned in my resume that I would pursue a Business management
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.
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 is based on leadership,managerial and communication skills. After or during the
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, my skills will enhance my performance and hopefully will bring more productivity to your company. I hope you will consider and approve my request to allow me to
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 part-time. I am hoping for your positive response. Yours sincerely

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph covers a single idea for better clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
While the letter effectively addresses the prompts, ensuring a logical flow would enhance comprehension.
Task Achievement
The letter successfully explains the reasons for reducing working hours and specifies preferred work times.
Task Achievement
Appropriate and professional tone maintained throughout the letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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