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The pie chart shows the worldwide distribution of private insurance policies. The table shows the private ownership policies of three countries. Summarize main features and make comparisons where relavent.

The pie chart shows the worldwide distribution of private insurance policies. The table shows the private ownership policies of three countries. Summarize main features and make comparisons where relavent.
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The pie chart illustrates the distribution of private
insurance
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 policies worldwide, and the table demonstrates the private
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 policy
ownerships
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of
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in
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 India, England, and Australia.
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, the highest percentage of private
insurance
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 is allocated for
auto
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,
while
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 the lowest percentage of
insurance
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are
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is
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 allocated for other purposes. In the UK, the highest proportion of
population
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the population
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have
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has
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 private
insurance
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, whilst in India, the lowest proportion of
population
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the population
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have
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has
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 private
insurance
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. Throughout the world, 35% of private
insurance
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are
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is
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 allocated for
auto
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,
while
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 31% of private
insurance
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are
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is
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 allocated for health.
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, only 6% of private
insurance
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are
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is
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 allocated for other purposes. In the UK, 25% of citizens have
ownerships
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ownership
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 of
insurance
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 policy, and 10% of their
insurance
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 is allocated for
auto
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, which is the highest. British people allocate the lowest proportion of
insurance
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 for life and
that is
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 5.6%.
However
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, in India, only 7% of
population
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the population
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 have
insurance
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 and they spend only 0.4% of their
insurance
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in
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on
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auto
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. In
Australia
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Australia,
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 15% of people have private
insurance
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, which is the second highest among
other
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the other
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 two countries. Like British people, Australians spend the highest amount of their private
insurance
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 in
auto
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 and the lowest amount in life, which is 1.9% and 0.5%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words insurance, auto with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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