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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The graph illustrates the ratio of
wheat
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export
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 within
Australia
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,
Cananda
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Canada
 and
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European
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the European
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Community
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 from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
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, the most active
traider
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trader
 of
this
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 crop throughout the
perion
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person
period
 was
Canada
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,
whereas
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 the least was
Australia
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.
It is clear that
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 at the beginning of the
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period
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 all countries exported approximately the same amount of
this
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 good,
whereas
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 by 1990 each country
onderwent
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underwent
 significant changes. Focusing first at the
first
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beginning of the
period
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, in 1985, the
export
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 of
wheat
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 in
Australia
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,
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European
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the European
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Community
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, and
Canada
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 was at the level of approximately 15, 17, and 20
million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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, respectively. By 1988, the
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export
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exports
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 in
Australia
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 and
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European
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the European
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Community
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 decreased by nearly 2-3
million
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, as opposed to
Canada
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, as
this
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 country, despite a slight drop in sales in 1986, sold 25% more
wheat
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 to the other areas. As for the
reamaining
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remaining
period
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, by 1989, the
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export
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exports
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 in
Canada
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 fell sharply, with less than 15
million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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 exported, which was followed by its increase, reaching its initial figure
at the end
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 of the
period
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. Regarding
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European
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the European
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Community
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, the frequency of
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export
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exports
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 to
another countries
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another country
other countries
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there went up gradually by more
that
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than
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 5
million
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of
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tonnes
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,
while
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 in
Ausrtalia
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Australia
 the volumes of
wheat
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transportations
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transportation
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 continued to fall by 1990 to the level of approximately 10
million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, export, australia, european, community, canada, period, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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