Influence of human beings on the world’s ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solution can you suggest?
It is an undeniable fact that there has been a very controversial discussion regarding species extinction. The primary causes of the loss are overpopulation and global warming, which has been going on for centuries.
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, maintaining a positive outlook for the future should be our priority, as we can tackle Linking Words
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through policy implementation, awareness and active movements.
First of all, the human population continues to grow rapidly in urban areas. Use synonyms
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, the cost of housing in the big cities is very expensive compared to their neighbouring towns, Linking Words
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, some people live outside the city. Linking Words
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, the government has to make several adjustments Linking Words
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deforestation.
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as waste and dependency on oil and gas. Sudden changes in temperature force living creatures to adapt to the Linking Words
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, not every soul has the opportunity to easily change places, Linking Words
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, a tree that has lived for hundreds of years can't be easily moved by human force.
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can be tackled if the authorities can create conservation for endangered floras and faunas, Use synonyms
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, reducing the potential of species extinction. Linking Words
In addition
to that, raising awareness through media and school syllabi can be very helpful in helping children understand the importance of diversity of breed. Linking Words
Finally
, regulators need to create policies that will discipline citizens to prevent animal killings or selling instinct plants.
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To sum up
, there is a plethora of reasons why humans are the main reasons for the loss of biodiversity. Linking Words
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, preventable actions can be taken to reduce or eradicate the dangerous conditions.Linking Words
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