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The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single yearI

The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single yearI
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The bar chart gives information about the most attractive transportation
way
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 to
the
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apply
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teenagers between three
catigory
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category
 (car,
motorcycle
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, bicycle) in the British, US,
France
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 and
Etaly
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Italy
.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 cars
is
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are
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 the most
populare
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popular
 transport
way
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 in
the
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apply
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Italy,
UK
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the UK
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 and
US
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the US
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,
whereas
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 in
Franse
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France
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bicycle
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the bicycle
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 is the most
prefereable
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preferable
 transportation
way
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among
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for
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 young people.
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Motorcycle
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Motorcycles
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represint
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represent
represents
 the
lowst
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lowest
 used form of transportation in the UK,
France
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 and Italy, unlike the United
State
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States
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,
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whereas
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where
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 the
motorcycle
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 was the least
favorate
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favoured
way
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. In
tearm
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terms
 of cars, about 70
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persons
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people
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 in
italy
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Italy
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were
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apply
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used
the
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a
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 car to navigate as
opposet
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opposed
 to
the
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apply
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France
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at
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apply
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40
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persons
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people
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. In the
Uk
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UK
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 and
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the US
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US
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US,
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 the
amount
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number
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 of teenagers using cars was the same at 60
persons
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. The bicycle was very
populare
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popular
 in
France
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at
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apply
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near
to
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apply
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50 young people
was
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were
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use
Wrong verb form
using
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 it, compared to 10
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persons
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people
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 in the US.
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Motorcycle
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Motorcycles
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more
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are more
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populare
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popular
 in the US as 30 young people use
it
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them
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, but it has
leas
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less
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 popularity in the other three
countrys
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countries
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words way, motorcycle, france, persons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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