Some people believe that professional such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training.Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give yoyr own opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
These days,
people
Use synonyms
tend to view things differently about the choice of a
place
Use synonyms
to
work
Use synonyms
for professional
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
show examples
worker
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
show examples
which means doctors and engineers. Some
people
Use synonyms
believe that
Linking Words
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
this
Fix the agreement mistake
these
show examples
high-quality
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
show examples
worker
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
show examples
should
work
Use synonyms
in the
country
Use synonyms
they training
whereas
Linking Words
others think they should have the right to choose the
place
Use synonyms
to
work
Use synonyms
. In
this
Linking Words
essay,
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
will give both views of my opinion. It is commonly believed that
people
Use synonyms
try to find the best
place
Use synonyms
for their education which
Correct subject-verb agreement
means
show examples
mean
Correct subject-verb agreement
means
show examples
this
Linking Words
could be the institution in their home
country
Use synonyms
or
Correct your spelling
overseas
show examples
oversea
Correct your spelling
overseas
show examples
. It is a benefit for
student
Add an article
a student
the student
show examples
who
study
Change the verb form
studies
show examples
, graduate
then
Linking Words
have
got
Verb problem
apply
show examples
a
place
Use synonyms
for training where they
familiar
Add a missing verb
are familiar
show examples
with
such
Linking Words
as laws or environments which are related to their career. Apart from what we discussed earlier, others might have an idea that those professional
people
Use synonyms
should be free to
decided
Change the verb
decide
show examples
where they want to start their
Fix the agreement mistake
careers
show examples
career
Fix the agreement mistake
careers
show examples
. We cannot deny that the
country
Use synonyms
that
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
a great
place
Use synonyms
to study is the developed
country
Use synonyms
which
their
Replace the word
there
show examples
might already have
high
Add an article
a high
the high
show examples
quality of living
whereas
Linking Words
some other
Use synonyms
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
show examples
country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
show examples
might need more
those
Correct determiner usage
apply
show examples
professional
people
Use synonyms
.
Also
Linking Words
, it could be very
Replace the word
limited
show examples
limit
Replace the word
limited
show examples
if
people
Use synonyms
have to
work
Use synonyms
only where they graduate and have been training only. In
this
Linking Words
modern
world
Add a comma
world,
show examples
people
Use synonyms
have the right to choose what to do or where to be. In conclusion, having considered
Change preposition
apply
show examples
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
both views, I, personally
believed
Wrong verb form
believe
show examples
that
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
show examples
human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
show examples
should have the right to choose and decide where they want to
work
Use synonyms
or live. Limitation of options could decrease their ability and not benefit
Change preposition
apply
show examples
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
socialization.
Submitted by auntra.c on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your essay more clearly by separating your ideas into distinct paragraphs for each point of view, ensuring a consistent flow of ideas.
task achievement
Try to fully develop each point with specific examples or evidence that illustrate the arguments you're making.
task achievement
Check for grammatical inconsistencies and punctuation errors to improve the clarity and professionalism of your writing.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, helping to frame the discussion of different viewpoints.
task achievement
You have successfully presented both sides of the argument, which is crucial for a balanced discussion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: