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Writing Samples
Band 1

TEAM SPORTS HELP SCHOOL STUDENTS TO LEARN MORE THAN USUAL GAMES. WHAT LESSONS WOULD THEY LEARN BY PLAYING TEAM SPORTS? HOW WOULD THESE LESSONS BE BENEFICIAL FOR STUDENTS IN THEIR FUTURE?

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sport
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are
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on
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 of the
significant
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 things for countries, many people tend to
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sport
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sould
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should
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students
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 learn more because
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sport
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 are highly beneficial for
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analysis
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 question and express my own opinion in the end. to being with,
team
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sport
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 add massive to cultivate essential valuable morals things for
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 as unity spirit and
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team
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teamwork
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, when playing in a
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students
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importance
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the importance
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collaboration
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, which means teamwork as
way
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 to achieve goals.
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 working
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 one hand
lead
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success
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collaboration
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collaboration

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coherence cohesion
Introduce a clear outline at the beginning of the essay, explaining what the main points will be. Structure your essay into clear paragraphs for each main point.
task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph presents a well-supported main point with examples. Elaborate on 'unity spirit,' 'teamwork,' and 'collaboration' with specific examples or studies.
language use
Revise sentences to improve grammar and word choice. For example, 'There is no denying the fact that team sport are on of the significant things' should be 'There is no denying the fact that team sports are significant.'
task achievement
The essay addresses an interesting and relevant topic on the benefits of team sports for students.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states the intention to analyze the question and express an opinion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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