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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of mobile
phones
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 and landlines per 100 citizens in
Canada
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, the USA, Germany, Denmark, the UK, Sweden, and Italy.
It is clear that
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 the popularity of mobile
phones
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 is higher in general.
Overall
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, in Germany, the UK, Sweden, and Italy more residents possess mobile
phones
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,
whereas
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 in
Canada
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 and the USA, landline
phones
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 are
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. Focusing first on the countries with the most frequent use of mobile
phones
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, in Germany, the number of smartphones per 100 users is 70, which is 10% higher compared to landlines. Considering the
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United
 Kingdom, Sweden, and Italy,
betwen
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between
 80 and 90 their
inhabitantsout
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inhabitants out
 of 100 of them use mobile connection there,
while
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 the corresponding figures for landline
phones
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 are marginally lower than 60, almost 70, and above 40, respectively. As for the remaining areas,
Canada
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 and the United States of America utilise landline
phones
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 at approximately the same level, with nearly 65 devices per 100 users, as opposed to less than 40 mobile
phones
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 in
Canada
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 and 10% more in the USA. Notably, in Denmark, the percentage for
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both categories is nearly the same,
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phones
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 per 100 citizens.
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