Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
According to
some Linking Words
people
, strict Use synonyms
punishments
for driving offences are important in order to reduce Use synonyms
traffic
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accidents
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However
, others, including me, believe that other measures would be more effective for Linking Words
road
safety.
On one hand, there are several benefits that strict Use synonyms
punishments
can bring. Penalties for dangerous Use synonyms
drivers
can be a deterrent, so Use synonyms
people
avoid repeating the same offence. There are various types of driving penalties, Use synonyms
such
as fines, licence suspension, and even prison sentences. The main aim of these Linking Words
punishments
is that they show dangerous Use synonyms
drivers
that their actions have negative consequences for not only themselves but Use synonyms
also
other Linking Words
people
, in Use synonyms
road
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accidents
. So, in Use synonyms
this
case, strict Linking Words
punishments
can be an effective way to punish those Use synonyms
drivers
and make them more disciplined and alert, and Use synonyms
that
they follow the rules carefully.
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On the other hand
, there are other ways to calm Linking Words
traffic
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accidents
. It is essential to educate Use synonyms
people
vitally, before giving them a driver's licence. It can be done in schools or other courses. From a very young age children should be taught to be careful when travelling by car or other transport means. Use synonyms
Moreover
, more attention could be paid to better Linking Words
road
designs. Warning signs and extending roads can be effective. Use synonyms
For example
, in Uzbekistan, roads are very narrow which can contribute to Linking Words
accidents
with cars. Use synonyms
Additionally
, in remote areas, there are insufficient Linking Words
traffic
lights and Use synonyms
road
bends. Use synonyms
As a result
, many Linking Words
road
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accidents
take place and frequently happen.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
while
strict Linking Words
punishments
can help to reduce Use synonyms
traffic
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accidents
, in my view it is essential to consider other measures, Use synonyms
such
as improving Linking Words
road
design and adding necessary signs to warn Use synonyms
drivers
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