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The graph below provides information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004.

The graph below provides information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004.
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This
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cost
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 of bananas in several countries from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, over a span of 10 years , Japan was on top of the other countries
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also
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 be more fluctuated.
However
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,
France
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 and Germany had more collaboration with each other
while
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, they had the same roses and plunges in a specific time period. But at least
France
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 soared and got second place.
On the other hand
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USA
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the USA
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 Rose gradually
since
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 1994 to 2000 but,
unfortunately
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 after
2000
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2000,
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 it remained flat with
number
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 of 1.0 till 2004. Germany dipped in 2000 to under 1.5 and
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 in 2001 to 1.5 but ,only after that declined steadily and became flat as same as
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 and it was beginning in 2002.
whereas
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 Germany sat
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third
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the third
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 place it reached more than
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the USA
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. The most expensive number
in
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of
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 bananas cost was in 1995 for Japan with values of
a
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slightly over in 2004 with more than 2.5. Japan had the most movement in the line and price changes.
France
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 commonly had no changes from 1994 to 1999 only in the next 5 years it had
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 increase in 2001.
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France
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 faced with hit a low
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cost but they had a resurgence in 2004 with a little more than 2.5 .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • price fluctuation
  • steady increase/decrease
  • significant rise/drop
  • trend
  • noticeable
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • highest
  • lowest
  • throughout the period
  • stable
  • volatile
  • potential reasons
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