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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
The table provides details about the underground
railway
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 networks in cities
such
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 as
London
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, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles.
Overall
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, the oldest
railway
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systems
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system
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to compare
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compared
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 with
other
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others
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 was
London
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,
also
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 with
bigger
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a bigger
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 distance of
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route
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the route
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. The most recent
railway
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 network was established in Los Angeles. The other systems are constructed in the same century. To start with, in
London
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's underground
railway
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, which
is
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 constructed in 1863, the consumption of
route
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 distance numbers 394
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kilometers
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kilometres
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. In
London
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,
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railway
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the railway
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 takes approximately 775 million passengers per year. Paris's underground
railway
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 was constructed in 1900, with 199
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
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, transports around 1191
millions
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million
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 passengers per year.
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, Tokyo's underground
railway
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, which was established in 1927, has 155
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
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route
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the route
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 and has the highest number of passengers per year, approximately 1927 million. The most recent underground
railway
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 system was built in 2001 and has the lowest distance of routes, 28
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kilometers
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kilometres
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, london, route, kilometers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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