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The increasing frequency of satellite launches and space debris is becoming a threat to the Earth. What are the main causes? What measures can be taken to address this?

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The development of technologies and the increasing demand of different countries from the benefits which give satellites and automatization of the processes in
space
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 give society the negative experience of threat to Earth and orbit. I think, that poor management by authorities is the main reason for these phenomena and specific governmental measures can play a pivotal role in tackling these issues. There are a lot of dysfunctional satellites, fragments and debris from
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space crafts
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spacecraft
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 orbiting Earth today, which are dangerous to people on the ground
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 could cause serious issues if they fall down. The problem is, there is no precise information on which area the part of the broken satellite or spacecraft will drop and the sizes of the objects are measured in tones. Personally, I think that the main cause that society faces with these issues is the lack of international rules for managing the
space
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 debris created by governments. The funds and commercial activities usually sustain organizational processes, manufacture of spare parts, and
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maintain activities in
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, when there are no specific guidelines that focus on the utilization of the junk from these operations. The funding should start from planning till the end of every hazard which can happen in
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 and orbit of Earth.
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, the fundamental approach to legal measures which should be
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 by science and technology, environmentally friendly and creation of the new conventions which are accepted by all countries could mitigate the issue. In conclusion, the increasing number of debris in
space
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 caused by a lack of planning, development and implementation of
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 technologies can be tackled by deep evolution and innovations in
space
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 laws and legislation. These steps will give more opportunities for the next generations to explore
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 and minimize the danger to our planet.

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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points, such as real-life instances of satellite collisions or government initiatives to tackle space debris.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a logical progression of ideas to enhance clarity. Organizing your thoughts more explicitly could improve the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and well-written, effectively summarizing the main ideas of the essay.
task achievement
The essay addresses the task by identifying causes and suggesting measures, showing understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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