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Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the present world, many people think that Earth will not be suitable for humans in
coming
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 days because of
pollution
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 others say that, to maintain humankind, we should find another
planet
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. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
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 statement, as I think that if we minimize the main factors that are damaging the
planet
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, we can overcome
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 situation. On the one hand, the main reason behind increasing
pollution
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 is the overgrowth of the population. With the increase in population, numerous sectors grow,
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 as air
pollution
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, land degradation, and depletion of natural resources. To illustrate, research published by Oxford University shows that there has been a significant increase in carbon emissions in the past decade.
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, it may disturb the environment and will not be suitable for humans. To overcome
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 problem, the government,
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 individuals, should promote the rules of
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, reuse, and reduce in their lives, which optimally help to reduce environmental problems.
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, another factor causing the destruction of the
planet
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 is not having stronger rules and regulations. The growing environmental problem is not only one nation's problem; it is a global issue.
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, globally, governments and high authorities should work together to mitigate
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 issue.
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, authorities can make stricter rules and find replacements for those problems that are causing
pollution
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.
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, fossil fuel–consuming vehicles can be replaced by electric vehicles.
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, governments should spend on projects helpful for protecting natural resources, which eventually work on reducing problems causing damage to the
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. In conclusion, to reduce environmental issues, governments and individuals are equally responsible. By working on the root causes of these issues, we can save the Earth for our coming generation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable development
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity loss
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitable planets
  • space colonization
  • terraforming
  • ethical dilemmas
  • resource allocation
  • technological advancements
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