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The Maps below show the paradise Island in the past and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Maps below show the paradise Island in the past and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps
provides
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provide
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informations
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information
pieces of information
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 about the
paradise
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island
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 in two
diffrent
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different
 times.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graphs that
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thire
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there
is
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are
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a lot of new places and roads
in
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on
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 the present map.
According to
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 what is shown,
the
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apply
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paradise
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island
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 in the past
was including
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included
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 only
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a beach
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beach
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beaches
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, rocks,
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a boat
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boat
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boats
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 and
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a sciontific
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sciontific
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scientific
 research
station
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stations
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.
In
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the
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apply
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present
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present,
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 the
island
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 shows a lot of
diffrence
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difference
, at
ferst
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first
 in the
center
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centre
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 of the
island
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thire
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there
 is a new
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resturant
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restaurant
 and close to it
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thire
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there
 is
BBQ
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a BBQ
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 area .
In
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 the right side of the
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resturant
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restaurant there
thire
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 is a
caffe
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cafe
. And there is a cycle path
in
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on
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 the south side of the
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resturant
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restaurant
.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 there is a hotel complex
in
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on
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 the left side of the open
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resturant
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restaurant
 and north of the hotel there is a swimming pool . The beach in
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paradise
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Paradise Island
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island
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 in the present
including
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includes
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swimming
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a swimming
the swimming
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 pool.
whereas
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is
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it
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 was not there in the past beatch.
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Also
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Also,
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 the pier now is all done in the past it was not all done. And there is another
diffrent
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different
difference
, the
crusie
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cruise
 ship
were
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was
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 a boat in the past
paradise
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island
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. And all of the
treas
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trees
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 are removed now .

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paradise, island, thire, resturant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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