the diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950.

the diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950.
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The maps show West Park Secondary School in three different years (1950, 1980,
2010
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and 2010

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).
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, the school building was enlarged during the first 30 years since its construction and the houses were demolished. The main road, located at the north of the maps, did not undergo any changes. The green area experienced a reduction during the 60-year period. In 1950, three residential buildings occupied the northwest side of the map, just south
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the main road,
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in 1980 those houses were replaced by a small squared car park and a new science block. At the bottom
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map, to the west, a sports field was created in 1980,
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the eastern playground constructed in 1950 remained the same. by 2010, the car park had expanded to cover almost the entire west part of the map,
while
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the school’s main building and science block were not modified. The sports field was reduced to roughly a third of its 1980 figure,
along with
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the playground that
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a third of its original surface.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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