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Task One Pineapple exports The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

Task One Pineapple exports The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
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The line graph illustrates the rate of transporting
pineapple
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 by three different states in 2009 and 2019.
Moreover
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, the pie graph shows a breakdown of the price to the spend of each
pineapple
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 in 2009.
Overall
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, it can be observed that country A was the
most
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nation that exported
pineapple
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 in 2019. Comparing country B with other countries, it had the largest number of exports of
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 fruit.
Nonetheless
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, distribution and retail were cost more than other categories. Looking at the first chart, approximately 10 million tonnes of
pineapple
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 was transported by nation A.
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, country C exported only half
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 tonnes of
pineapple
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 in 2019. In 2009, state B had the highest export numbers of
pineapple
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 which was around 5 million tonnes. Regarding the pie chart , the percentage of distribution and retail was more than taxes 35% and 16%, respectively. Whilst the proportion of producers was slightly higher than export costs, the deferent between the two of them was just 1 per cent. The percentage of profit was much bigger than import licences of profit was much bigger than import licenses of
pineapple
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. To illustrate, it was 18% and 10%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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