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In many countries today parents are able to send their children to single sex school. Some people think that this have disadvantages in later life.

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Recently, some parents in many regions
send
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 their
kids
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 to
single
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gender
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education
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center
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. They have perspectives that
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will make their
kids
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 on their subjects in order to
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better
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 future.
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, some individuals have their opinion that
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 will give drawbacks in the next life since life is not only about academics.
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elaborate
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 of these perspectives and
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 the writer's opinion. First and foremost,
kids
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single sex
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 school most likely only think about their studies and other
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extracurriculars
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 as sports, art, music, etc. They will pursue their academics to get higher
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 so they will continue
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further
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. Not only that, they will learn
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 based on
ther
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their
gender
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 as well,
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instance
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 knitting, embroidery, cooking,
baking
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 for girls.
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, skills for boys are archery,
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strategy
plan
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, chess etc.
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,
single
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gender
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education
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center
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centers
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also
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are also
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 famous for their disciplines.
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, many private
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 which is
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gender
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education
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 has
its
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 own regulations to make
kids
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 focus on their studies.
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,
single
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gender
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education
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center
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 has
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 own drawbacks,
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 as these
kids
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 do not learn how to interact with
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gender
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 skill is really needed in
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real life because as a social creature, human needs interaction with other people. In
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 era where everything is changing
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, people need to
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collaboration
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. If the
kids
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 do not know how to interact with different
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gender
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genders
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, it will be hard for them to
facing
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 real lives. In conclusion, in my own perspective,
kids
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 should know to interact with other people, not only with the same
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, if the
kids
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 only
focusing
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 on academics, it might be bad for them in the future. Since in the real
lives
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life
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,
team work
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teamwork
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 is really needed, not only in the office
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 but
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 in the family.

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clarity
Consider rephrasing the first sentence to improve clarity and flow. For example, 'Recently, some parents have chosen to send their children to single-sex schools.'
grammar
Ensure to proofread for spelling errors, such as 'ellaborate' instead of 'elaborate,' and ‘achieved’ instead of ‘achieve.’
lexical resource
Try to avoid unnecessary repetition and maintain variety in your vocabulary. For example, instead of repeating 'single gender education center,' consider using synonyms or restructuring sentences.
content
You clearly outlined both perspectives regarding single-sex education, which is essential for a balanced discussion.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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