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After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. In your letter: Introduce yourself let him/her know why you are writing Express your appreciation offer him/ her to visit your home with this family.

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Dear Kaylin, I am writing to be truly grateful to you for taking care of me
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 I was in hospital for treatment after I had an accident
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 month. I am Tram Vu, a victim who was in room 7 in the Green Hospital
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 February. I was the person that you were in charge of.
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 I was in the hospital and couldn't even walk, you always helped me to do my personal activities, you brought me my medicine every day. I am very appreciative of you for helping a lot of that time. It was a tough moment for me. You were the only one talk to me every day, making me feel better. For all of your help, my brother would like me to invite you to have dinner at my home. My family want to say thank you to you because of what you do for me. Yours sincerely, Tram Vu

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Consider adding a brief introduction of how the accident occurred to provide context.
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Ensure to maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter, perhaps by adding a more personal touch in your closing.
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You might want to divide your thoughts into clearer paragraphs, as this would enhance readability and organization.
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Try to use a variety of linking phrases to make the letter flow more smoothly.
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You expressed your gratitude effectively, which is the main purpose of the letter.
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The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gratitude
  • appreciation
  • subtly
  • kindness
  • assisted
  • heartfelt
  • specific examples
  • sacrifices
  • safety
  • comfort
  • invitation
  • eager
  • personal connection
  • reflecting
  • impact
  • reinforcing
  • deep gratitude
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