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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter • Explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the musuem • Describe some skill and qualities you have the would be useful • Give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my interest in serving your museum which I came to know about from your advertisement in the local newspaper. Since my childhood, I have always been interested in social welfare matters.
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, I feel proud when someone gets helped by me. It is my belief that, that feelings can never be bought and
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 the main reason I am interested in voluntary
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. It is my pleasure to share my previous experience in
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. I am proud to share that, presently I am serving as class representative of my section at school, where I need to perform a lot of extra
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 for other pupils.
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, I have been a member of the social club of my college that performs so many voluntary social development works. As a member there I took part in relief distribution
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 during the
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 flood.
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, It must be informed that I worked as a team leader there.
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, it might be said that I have valuable experience in the voluntary
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 field. Though I am eager to
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 in your museum, I must inform you that, I can not join immediately to the
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. As I am a class 11 student, my final year exam is on the next month. I will have a prescheduled visit to my native village with my family just after my exam.
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, I will be available after 15th January when It would be possible for me to give you full support. Thanks for considering my interest and I am looking forward to getting a reply from you soon Yours sincerely Andy

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task achievement
Consider refining your introduction to include specific reasons for wanting to volunteer, and explicitly mention the museum’s name to personalize your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Try to enhance the flow between paragraphs, perhaps by using linking phrases, to create a more cohesive narrative throughout your letter.
task achievement
Your passion for social welfare and previous volunteering experiences are well articulated, displaying your commitment to helping others.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your letter is clear, with distinct paragraphs that address different points, making it easy to follow.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • voluntary work
  • unpaid work
  • museum
  • community service
  • exhibits
  • art and culture
  • communication skills
  • organizational skills
  • commitment
  • availability
  • part-time
  • experience
  • passion
  • community involvement
  • engagement
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