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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map shows a complex
viw
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view
 of Brandfield
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city
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City
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, with the new shopping mall
build
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built
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 in the
vacinity
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vicinity
, and a proposed plan for
also
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 for S1 and S2.
Overall
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, The map
display
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displays
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 the
city
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center
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centre
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, with a river
runing
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running
 through
form
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from
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south western
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southwestern
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 part of the
city
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 to the northern region.
To begin
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 with, Brandfield
city
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contain
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 two major areas where people reside, which are the Housing
estate
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, located
at
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 the north and the industrial
estate
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 situated in the southern part of the
city
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, with a railway connecting the two
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estate
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.
Furthermore
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, a golf course and park
is
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are
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 evident in the western region. The
City
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center
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centre
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, located in the heart of the
city
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 in
Red colour
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red
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, is surrounded by roads and
railway
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a railway
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 line. In the future, two sites will
be build
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be built
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 in the
city
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, S1 will be situated in the north, close
the
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to the
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 housing
estate
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, and between the river and the road.
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While the
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The
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 second site S2, will
be build
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be built
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 in
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the south-east
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south-east
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southeast
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 region of the
city
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, adjacent to the industrial
estate
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, and between the railway and the main road.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, estate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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