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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares how many US
households
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 who by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the
number
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 of US
households
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 in 2015 had the highest salaries earning $100,000 or more in
three
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years
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.
By contrast
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, the
number
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 of US
households
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 in 2011 hit the "lowest money" earning $75,000-$99,999. The families in the US had the same quite high trend between less than $25,000 and $25,000-$49,999 in
three
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years
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. It can be seen that the
number
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 of US families incomed less than $25,000
were
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about 25
million
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 to 29
million
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people
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 from 2007, 2011 and 2015. The
number
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 of US
households
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 that earned $25,000-$49,999 in
three
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years
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 was nearly 26
million
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, 29
million
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,
28
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and 28
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million
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people
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.
Besides
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, the
number
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 of US families who had money between $50,000-$74,999 and $75,000-$99,999 were the lowest periods in
three
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years
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. The figure of
households
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 incomed $50,000-$74,999 was unchanged around 14
million
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people
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 in 2007, 2010 and 2015.
However
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, US household's salaries
$
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of $
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75,000-$99,999 had a small fluctuation from 13 to 15
million
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people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, number, three, years, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • households
  • income distribution
  • peak
  • rise
  • fall
  • stable
  • significant
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
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