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The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 60 50 40 30 20 10 0 Children's books Adult fiction Educational books The sales of three different kinds of books between 2002 and 2006 2002 2003 2004 2005 2006 Million dollars

The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 60 50 40 30 20 10 0 Children's books Adult fiction Educational books The sales of three different kinds of books between 2002 and 2006 2002 2003 2004 2005 2006 Million dollars
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of three types of
books
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 (
children
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's
books
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,
adult
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fiction
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 and educational
books
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) sold from 2002 to 2006 in one country.
Overall
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, the trend of
children
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's
books
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 increased dramatically, whilst the opposite trend was observed in
adult
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fiction
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 which made
children
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's
books
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 the most popular kind almost every year. Educational
books
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 fluctuated throughout the given period and surpassed
adult
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fiction
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at the end
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.
Although
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books
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 for
children
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 were sold
initially
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 just over 30
million
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dollars
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, the
number
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 grew sharply in the next year, overtaking
adult
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fiction
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 before continuing
gradually
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going
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 up, and significantly
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increasing
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 in the final period to peak at around 57
million
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dollars
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 which was the most
number
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 in sales across all types of
books
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.
Adult
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fiction
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,
on the other hand
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, stood at the
hightest
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highest
number
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 at over 50
million
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dollars
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 before fluctuating and significantly declining to its lowest point in 2006.
This
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 made
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adult
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adults
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 the least. Educational
books
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 gained under 30
million
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dollars
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 in 2002 and had a similar trend of increasing as
children
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's
books
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. The sales,
then
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, dropped again before going up to surpass the
number
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 of
adult
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fiction
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. It eventually
become
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 the second-highest in 2006.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, children, adult, fiction, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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