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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts show the percentages of adolescents using their phones for different purposes in Africa between 2016 and 2019.
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, young people use phones for social networks the most as shown in 4 years, and small numbers of people use gadgets for making phone calls. It can be seen that, in 4 years from 2016 to 2019, the usage
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 social networks was the top percentage
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 for 50%,48%,51%, and 56% respectively.
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, the second higher statistic is sending emails but it gradually declined over the following years from 25% in 2016 to 19% in 2019.
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, the Africans used digital cameras it accounted for 15 in both 2016 and 2017 and soared to 2019 at 20% dramatically.
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, making phone calls was not popular in Africa at school age around 13%.

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