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The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002.

The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002.
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The line graph provides key information about the percentage of gold
sales
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 in Dubai during 2002. The units are measured in Durham.
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, it is clear from the graph that the gold
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 had
decrease
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 over time.
In addition
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, there was
significant
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 rise
in
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 the beginning of 2002,
while
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 it dropped sharply
in
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 the end of the year.
According to
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 the data, the gold
sales
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 began with 200
million
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dirhams
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 in January,
then
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 it was a dramatic increase and had reached 350
million
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dirhams
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 respectively. Regarding
sales
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 in August, the percentage of
sales
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was
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reached almost 200
million
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dirhams
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,
then
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 it dropped again in September it roughly 100
million
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dirhams
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. There was a
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 rise.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million, dirhams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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