The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002.

The line graph provides key information about the percentage of gold

sales

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in Dubai during 2002. The units are measured in Durham.

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, it is clear from the graph that the gold

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had

decrease

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decreased

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over time.

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, there was

significant

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a significant

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rise

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the beginning of 2002,

while

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it dropped sharply

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the end of the year.

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the data, the gold

sales

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began with 200

million

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dirhams

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in January,

then

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it was a dramatic increase and had reached 350

million

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dirhams

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respectively. Regarding

sales

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in August, the percentage of

sales

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was

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reached almost 200

million

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dirhams

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then

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it dropped again in September it roughly 100

million

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dirhams

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. There was a

fluctuate

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rise.

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Feb 25, 2025

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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115 words

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The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002.

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