Some people believe that computers are more a hinderance than a help in todays world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them. In what ways are computers a hinderance? What is your opinion?
It is believed that technology is not as helpful as expected,
however
, some people consider it essential for their daily routines. Electronic devices could be an obstacle if not used appropriately Linking Words
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as too much time wasted on social media. I think that tech is fundamental in our modern societies, Linking Words
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as in our education in order to keep growing but always doing it with common sense because if not could lead to serious health problems.
On the one hand, electronic devices Linking Words
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as computers have been claimed to be not the best option for our brain development as individuals spend too many hours on them. Screen time has increased since the internet was created, and Linking Words
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, society has become addicted to everything related to it, like social networks. Linking Words
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, users from youth to old ages who use daily social media have experienced mental health problems as these platforms incite to compare to influencers that show their lifestyle is perfect which certainly is not nearly the reality. My point of view is that computers are not a hindrance, people are not aware of how huge Linking Words
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issue is and some regulations should be implemented so as to create consciousness in them, making them able to make better decisions.
Oppositely, scientists have demonstrated that using technology to make improvements in society is one of the best ways to keep acquiring knowledge. Lately, artificial intelligence has been developed and now is being used in high schools and universities for educational purposes. Linking Words
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, it has been proved that teaching with laptops could be really useful as students can learn more diverse skills than a few years ago; Linking Words
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, they should be taught how to use them and how many are appropriate because excessive usage of them could lead to problems in the future. I consider that governments should provide educational centres with information about how it should be used.
To summarize, nowadays for some people is inconceivable to live without computers because they make life easier but it does not mean that should be used for everything. Electronic devices are extraordinary tools that shorten or even make easier activities if correctly used. From my point of view, teaching how to use them should be a priority as individuals will be able to manage better their time and protect themselves from any adversity that could happen.Linking Words
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task achievement
To enhance task achievement, ensure more balanced arguments for both views. You could provide more specific examples of how computers hinder daily activities beyond social media.
coherence cohesion
While the essay shows a logical progression, transitions can be more subtle. Think about using a variety of cohesive devices to create smoother ties between ideas.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion clearly present the topic and your opinion about it.
task achievement
The main points are well-supported with examples, especially in discussing mental health effects and educational impacts.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.