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The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart presents the total of universities' international
applicants
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 in European countries
such
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 as
China
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, Japan, the
USA
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, and Russia from 2004 to 2008.
Overall
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,
China
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 marked as
a
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the
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 country with the highest
number
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 of
applicants
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 for two years before reaching the same
number
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 of candidates as
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USA
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the USA
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 in 2006 and lost
their
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its
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 position as a university with the highest
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applicants
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number of applicants
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 to the
USA
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, which experienced steady growth in candidates' interest for their university and reached their peak in 2008. In 2004 and 2005,
China
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 and Russia experienced a decrease in international
applicants
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' interest
while
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 the
USA
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 showed a steadily rising
number
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 of potential students and Japan remained with the same numbers. From 2006 onwards, all of the countries except
China
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 reported a growth of international students who applied to their
university
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universities
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, with the
USA
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 leading by showing a significant rise with more than 25000 candidates by 2008.
On the other hand
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, from 2007 to 2008, the
number
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 of
applicants
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 in
China
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 dropped slightly to 15000.
However
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, despite the drop,
China
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 still had a higher
number
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 of
applicants
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 than Japan and Russia,
that
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which
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 could not pass 10000
applicants
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 over the years

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words applicants, china, usa, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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