In many countries, young people are moving from rural areas to cities to work or study. Why is this happening? What are advantages or disadvantages of this trend?

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These days, there are a lot of countries, young

peolpe

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people

prefer to live in cities to

work

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or study more than

villages

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in villages

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. So, in

this

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essay, I am going to discuss both

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advantages and disadvantages

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this

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point.

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the one hand,

the

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posetives

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positives

of living in the

city

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, individuals can get on all services,

such

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as schools, companies,and hospitals.

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, their salary is

a high

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higher

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than

work

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the

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rural areas,

they

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and they

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will get extra gifts,

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, when they

work

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hard, they will get money and vacation,

as well as

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promote

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in the

work

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, when they have

holiday

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a holiday

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, they will spend their time with family or

friend

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friends

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a nice places

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a nice place

nice places

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such as

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park

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parks

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cinema

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cinemas

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, and coffee. They can go anywhere in the

city

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that they want

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because they

are feeling

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feel

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comfortable and

fun

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have fun

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people

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for people

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when

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who

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live in the

city

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, most of

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the building

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building

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buildings

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have a high price, they can'

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apply

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take

rant

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rent

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, because it is so expensive, but in the village the houses are

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quiet

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quite

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simple.

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, the air is not

cleaner

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clean

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while

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it is so pure in the village and natural.

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, in the cities, there are

croweded

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crowded

amonge

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among

bulidings

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buildings

and

road

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roads

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, and there are noisy, old people can'

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sleep well, but in the

contryside

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countryside

, most people feel glad

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apply

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living,

the

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apply

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living there is very quiet and comfortable.

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, in the village , they can'

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find for job

easly

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easily

, due

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to it

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apply

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there aren'

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more jobs. In conclusion, I think that

peopel

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people

can live in

they

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the

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city

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, because they have their reasons, they can get

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apply

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all

things

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the things

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they

wants

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want

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, but if they want

spend

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to have

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a fun time, they can visit

countryside

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the countryside

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and

get

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have

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some enjoyable.

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Improve the introduction by rephrasing for clarity, and ensure that it presents both the reasons for young people's migration and the advantages and disadvantages clearly.

coherence

Organize paragraphs more logically, ensuring clear transitions between ideas and maintaining focus on one main idea per paragraph.

coherence

Use more precise vocabulary and correct spelling throughout the essay to enhance clarity and professionalism.

task achievement

Provide more specific examples and details to support your points in each paragraph for a stronger argument.

content

Good attempt in discussing both advantages and disadvantages of living in cities versus rural areas.

content

The essay includes a conclusion that summarizes the main ideas and presents a personal opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

286 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Urbanization
Metropolitan
Career advancement
Higher education institutions
Cultural diversity
Infrastructure
Rural exodus
Standard of living
Networking
Overcrowding
Socio-economic factors
Quality of life

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