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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of magazines sold per
person
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 in five countries—
Country
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 A,
Country
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 B,
Country
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 C,
Country
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 D, and
Country
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 E—in 2003 and 2005,
along with
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 projected
sales
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 for 2007.
Overall
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, the data shows a decline in
magazine
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sales
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 across all countries except
Country
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 D, where
sales
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 are expected to increase slightly.
Country
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 B had the highest
magazine
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sales
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 in 2003, followed closely by
Country
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 A,
while
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Country
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 E recorded the lowest
sales
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 throughout the period. In 2003, both
Country
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 A and
Country
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 B had
magazine
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sales
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 of around 50 per
person
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.
However
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,
sales
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 in these countries gradually declined in 2005 and are projected to decrease
further
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 by 2007. A similar trend is observed in
Country
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 C, where
sales
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 dropped from about 35 per
person
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 in 2003 to a lower figure in 2005 and are expected to decline
further
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 in 2007.
Conversely
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,
Country
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 D experienced a slight increase in
sales
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, with numbers rising from around 18 per
person
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 in 2003 to approximately 20 in 2005 and a projected increase in 2007.
Country
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 E had the lowest
magazine
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sales
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, with minimal changes over the years. In summary, the data indicates a downward trend in
magazine
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sales
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 in most countries, except for
Country
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 D, which shows a positive trend.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words person, country, sales, magazine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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