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Writing Samples
Band 5

You visit a cafe every day. Write a letter to the manager of the cafe. In your letter – Say what you like about the cafe - Suggest an improvement to the cafe – Explain the benefits of your suggestion

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Dear David, I am writing
this
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 letter to give
a
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feedback about the cafe "Warner Cafe".You and your staff are
too
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so
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 good that I could not resist
to give
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giving
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a
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feedback. First, the way your staff deal and serve
to
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the consumer with a big smile and prepare orders are fantastic and efficient.The range of continental
cusins
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cousins
cuisine
cuisines
 and the variety of beans make my
everyday
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every day
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 special.
Although
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 everything is good at the cafe, I would like to suggest a few things. First
one
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, add some variety of tea and cheese for Indian consumers. I
also
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 noticed there is
balcony
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a balcony
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 sitting arrangement which has been closed
from
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for
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 the
last
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 5 years , I think it should be opened for the consumers .
The more
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More
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 options in tea will attract more consumers especially
Indian
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Indians
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, and as summer is on
it
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its
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 way
this
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 will allow
consumer
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consumers
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 to
have
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sit in fresh air and make
coffe
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coffee
 more enjoyable. I would
glad
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be glad
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 if you consider these changes. Thank you.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to check punctuation and spacing between words, such as in 'cafe "Warner Cafe".You', which should be 'cafe "Warner Cafe". You'.
Task Achievement
Consider breaking down longer sentences for clarity, e.g., 'The range of continental cusins and the variety of beans make my everyday special.' could be simplified.
Task Achievement
Expand on the benefits of your suggestions to strengthen the argument.
Task Achievement
The friendly tone and compliment about the staff present a positive image of the cafe.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is respectful and clear, effectively addressing both appreciation and suggestions.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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