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Do good results at school or college guarantee success in life? Discuss the advantages that a good education can have on your future. Do you believe that studying hard will bring a better life?

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Education at school or college is one of the important steps in human life. Honestly, each part of the day can be an experience in life, and the role of education is higher. There are a lot of pros of a high quality of preparation, because
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the way that
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 is going through learning at school allows
people
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 to be more responsible, successful, wiser and proficient. Each discipline in the learning process, maths, biology, geography or chemistry can expand
people
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’s horizons.
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 have an opportunity to travel around the world with
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little knowledge
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 geography or to count numbers without
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.
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 the globalized world,
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 should have
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good training for adapting to any new technologies. Nowadays,
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 or robots with artificial intelligence systems control reality, afterward many
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 lose their jobs.
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, in Indian
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 robot teachers are working at schools and exchanging more qualified specialists. More and more
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 believe that robots can not teach
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 certificated teachers.
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,
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 should study hard to manage
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 spreading trend. I believe that studying hard can stop AI progress or keep a balance between
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's brains and robots.
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, successful outcomes at school or college give an assurance
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 the best future.

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content
The essay contains relevant examples to support your arguments, such as the reference to robot teachers in Indian schools.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • higher education
  • advanced degrees
  • specialized careers
  • critical thinking skills
  • problem-solving
  • networking opportunities
  • connections
  • job prospects
  • salary
  • job stability
  • quality of life
  • discipline
  • time management
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