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The graph below gives information about the number of tourists who visited five different countries between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of tourists who visited five different countries between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provides information about the quantity of
tourist
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tourists
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 who
arrival
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arrived
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 in five countries from 1995 to 2010.
overall
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, it can
be see
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 that all countries risen all the time,
excep
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except
 the
USA
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, which declined in the
last
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 period.
However
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,
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USA
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the USA
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 was the highest in all periods. in 1995, exactly about 70
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millions
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million
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people
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 visited
to
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apply
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America and
its
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it
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 reached its
peaks
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peak
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 in the year
of
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apply
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2025
,
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 when over
than
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apply
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90
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millions
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million
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 arrived in
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USA
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the USA
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.
USA
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 arrival
tourist
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tourists
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 go down in 2005 and 2010 respectively. France
experinced
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experienced
 a significant
increased
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. At the beginning of the year,
in
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apply
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1995, just under 40 million
people
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 went to France and in the
last
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 period, the number of
people
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 reached the highest visitors to France. When it comes Asian country, Malaysia, it increased gradually from approximately 20
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millions
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million
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 to 50
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millions
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million
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. Brazil
was
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had
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higher
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more
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 visitors than
egypt
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Egypt
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,
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however
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however,
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 the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 was about the same, just below 10
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millions
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million
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, millions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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