IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter •Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly. •Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours. •Suggest what should be done about the problem.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to inform you about the issues caused to residents by the unsuccessful trash cleaning system in our neighbourhood. As you may know, we recently went through changes in our garbage cleaning system, where the council asked people to keep their household trash to go and dump into the large bins, placed around our region. So that, the trucks can pick it up directly from the units. In case, if there is a delay in that process, it leaves the area filled up with undesired rubbish.
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 laying junk is causing unpleasant smells around the local houses
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 leading to the birth of mosquitoes as well if there is rain.
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 puts the health of the children and senior citizens at risk. I would suggest that if we can have
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 system discontinued and
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 have the garbage picked up from the front of the houses or ensure the trucks come on time to pick up the garbage, that would be a step forward to cleanliness in our surroundings. Your actions on
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 urgent matter would be highly appreciated by the citizens of our region. Yours faithfully, Vaibhav Parmar

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples of how the changes to the rubbish collection system have impacted your daily life or the lives of your neighbors, as this would strengthen the argument and show a clearer connection to the task.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main idea. For instance, you can clearly separate the description of the problem, its effects, and your suggestions into distinct paragraphs to improve clarity.
task achievement
You have maintained a positive and respectful tone throughout your letter, which is appropriate for a letter to the local council.
coherence and cohesion
The closing of the letter is polite and formal, which aligns well with the context of the communication.
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