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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)
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The bar graph illustrates the amount of money that 10
countries
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 globally spend, in
dollars
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, on travelling during the year 2014.
Overall
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, the chart indicates that the more developed
countries
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 have the highest spending rates, compared to the least developed
countries
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, at the bottom of the graph.
It is clear that
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 China spent 110
Billion
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Dollars
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, reaching the leaderboard,
while
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 its rivalries, the USA and Germany, both came short of 30
Billion
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Dollars
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.
However
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, most
countries
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 in Asia,
such
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 as South Korea and Hong Kong, reached the same amount of USD.
Furthermore
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; India, Malaysia and Taiwan are all placed at the bottom. Taiwan reached the lowest, with a mere 10, Malaysia 12 and India 15
Billion
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 US
Dollars
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. The
countries
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, Britain and Singapore, illustrate the intermediate mark,
due to
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 Britain spending 56
Billion
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dollars
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 and Singapore falling below 40
Billion
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dollars
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, equating to 30
Billion
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 USD short of the United Kingdom.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, dollars, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • spending
  • travel budgets
  • ranking
  • economy
  • consumer behavior
  • significant
  • notable
  • comparative analysis
  • patterns
  • habits
  • implications
  • spending habits
  • highest
  • highest-ranked
  • total expenditure
  • top-tier
  • lower-tier
  • economic status
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