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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical aplliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in housheholds in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical aplliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in housheholds in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs depict the information regarding the
population
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 of China from the
year
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 1960,
along with
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 predictions up to the
year
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 2050. The units of measurement are percentages.
Overall
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, the graph shows an incline in the percentage of the
population
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 above 60 years
whereas
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 a significant decline is seen in
people
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 aged between 15 to 64 years.
However
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, over the years variation is shown in the percentage of children in the category of 0 to 14. It is evident that, in the
year
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 1960, about 38
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 were of age 0 to 14
while
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 slightly higher (nearly 46%) was the
population
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 of 15 to 64.
However
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, the
population
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 above 65 was approximately 6 per cent.
Thus
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, by the
year
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 2010, an increasing trend in the percentage of 0 to 14 and 65+ was seen
whereas
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 a decreasing trend was seen in the
people
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 of age 15 to 64.
Furthermore
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, it is predicted that by the
year
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 2050, the
population
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 of 65+ will rise to nearly 30% and a decrease among
people
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 of ages 0 to 14 to 17.5%.
In addition
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 to
this
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, a downfall after a rise is noticed in the
population
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 of
people
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 in the age group 15 to 64.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, year, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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