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Many people think that museums and galleries should only show work from local artists rather than work from other countries. Do you agree?

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Some argue that museums and
art
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 galleries should have only local
artists
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'
works
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 rather than international
artists
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. I agree with
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 statement because it is the best option for understanding the cultural identity of countries, and
also
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 local
artists
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 may be encouraged financially.
Firstly
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, regional
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 exhibitions may provide more information about the
people
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's cultural identity. If governments or municipalities display more local
artists
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' work,
people
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, especially students, may learn more about their culture and history.
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,
people
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 can easily understand their
art
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 more than international ones; it creates a strong relationship between society and
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.
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, visitors may understand the whole background of the local culture thanks to the displaying of local arts rather than international ones.
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, there are some exhibitions displaying only Turkish
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'
works
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;
people
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 can learn about the historical period of Turkish and Islamic
art
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 more quickly in
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 way.
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, most
artists
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 suffer financial problems
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 they continue their careers, so they may be encouraged by society
by displaying
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 their
works
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 in regional exhibitions. If they are supported financially, they will create more work. So that local
art
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 may develop and may be met by new generations.
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,
people
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 recognize the local
artists
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, so they will pay attention to them.
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, most European countries hold organizations, which include only local
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, for their regional
artists
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 to protect them financially and culturally.
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, displaying only local
artists
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' work rather than international ones means learning the cultural background easily and encouraging
artists
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 financially to increase their recognition.

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task achievement
Consider elaborating on your main points with more details and examples to provide a clearer picture of your arguments.
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structure
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural Heritage
  • Regional Culture
  • Economic Benefits
  • Local Talent
  • Authentic Local Art
  • Diverse Perspectives
  • Mutual Understanding
  • Balanced Approach
  • Cultural Exchange
  • Artistic Styles
  • Innovations
  • Global Reputation
  • Exhibitions
  • Preservation
  • Promotion
  • Unique Aspects
  • Educational Experience
  • Mutual Understanding
  • Tolerance
  • Stimulating the Economy
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