The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

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how the monthly prices of copper,

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and zinc changed

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average in 2014. Units are measured in percentages.

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, the proportion of

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was the highest at the beginning of the year,

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the value of zinc had the most changes in December. Moving to a more detailed analysis, the rate of

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accounted for 6% in January and

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it started to decrease dramatically to reach its lowest rate, at -3%, over the next 5 months. After a gradual

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it maintained the same level(-1%) until September. After that, it grew up and finished the timeframe at 1%.

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, the figures for copper and

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were responsible for 2% and 1% respectively in the first month.

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, the former

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steadily by 1.5% in June,

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the latter

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decrease considerably to -1% in June after a rise to its highest point for one month. Over the next 4 months, both figures fluctuated

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rose and finished the timeframe 1.5%(copper) and 2%(zinc).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel with synonyms.

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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average monthly change
prices of metals
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