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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two
pictues
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pictures
illustrates
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 the variation in people having labour-saving
devies
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devices
 that include washing machines,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and vacuum cleaners in
a
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an
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 unnamed country with the
time
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 devoted
in
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to
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 performing household chores from 1920 to 2019.
Firstly
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, in the year 1920, there were no
house
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houses
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 that
have
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had
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 a fridge
whereas
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 through the
perios
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period
periods
 of 20
years
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 the percentage of houses sharply increased to more than half and gradually
keep
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kept
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 growing till it
reaches
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reached
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 its peak by the year 1980 and
then
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 remained steady.
In addition
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, the use of vacuums and automatic washers
beginned
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beginning
beginner
 with 30 and 40
percent
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per cent
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 respectively. The proportion gradually surged
untill
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until
 they got to a similar point which was three
quaters
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quarters
 in 1960.
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, in the following
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years
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years,
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 users of robot
vaccum
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vacuum
 dramatically inclined
while
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of houses owning washers shows a slight fall over 10
years
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then
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 rose to 73% approximately. To move
further
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, as there
were
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was
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 more labour-saving
equimnent
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equal
time
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 spent
over
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on
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 homemaking significantly decreased from 1920 to 2019. By 1920, people usually spent 50 hours on housework which steadily dropped to less than one-fourth in
fourty
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forty
years
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.
Furthermore
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, by 2019
is
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it
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 was predicted that humans will only consume there 10% of their
time
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 in domestic tasks.
Overall
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, it was observed that before
21th
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the 21st
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 century refrigerators and
vaccum
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vacuum
 cleaners were owned by fewer people
however
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, with the
time
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 period the number
rised
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rose
raised
rises
 by 100 % .
On the other hand
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, washing gadgets that were more
in
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popular in
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 1920 became less popular by 2019.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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