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Band 8.5

You recently did a cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course Say how much cooking you have done since the course Suggest another cooker course you would like the school to offer

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I am Sakshi Kansara and I joined one of your cookery classes for three months in Toronto. I am writing
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 letter in regard to give my feedback on the classes I attended. I must say I enjoyed my time there and all the chefs were pretty amazing and well-spoken.
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, the cookery class were divided into three sections,
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 as different cuisines, baking and sizzlers, and I honestly learned a lot from the 'different cuisines' class, as the chef Mr Geller is a very knowledgeable person, he just doesn't use to teach us to cook different varieties of dishes but
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 teaches us about respective nation's cultures and how the dish was invented, which I found really mesmerising.
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, I have been experimenting with my learning at home and my husband really enjoys the taste and unique food items.
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, I would like to recommend another course 'Making pasta from scratch'.
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 I did learn to make pasta in one class, having another section on making it from scratch sounds really fun and interesting. I hope you will consider my feedback and cannot wait to join another course. Yours sincerely, Sakshi

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coherence cohesion
Ensure subject-verb agreement throughout the letter. Change 'the cookery class were divided' to 'the cookery classes were divided'.
coherence cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures for greater impact.
task achievement
Expand a bit more on your cooking at home, perhaps by giving specific examples of dishes you've enjoyed making.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with distinct paragraphs for each point.
task achievement
The tone is friendly and appropriate for the audience.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • appreciation
  • hands-on experience
  • variety of recipes
  • expertise
  • cooking frequency
  • new recipes
  • host dinner parties
  • specific cuisine
  • vegan cooking
  • advanced pastry techniques
  • beneficial
  • attract students
  • feedback
  • suggestions
  • course director
  • cookery school
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