You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course ' Say how much cooking you have done since the course Suggest another cookery course you would like the school to offer.

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Dear Sir, Hope you are doing great, as
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received an email from you that, you need feedback from me about the cooking lessons I have taken from your school. All the lectures were great and the practical classes were
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fabulous and knowledgeable. In the classes I enjoyed a lot because I have a keen interest in making food, all the lessons were decent and elaborated on the details of cooking.
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gained knowledge about the presentation of food, which gives the real satisfaction.
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, after cookery lessons, I never go to a restaurant on the weekend, as I normally go, Know I prepare my healthy and decent meals at home without any hesitation.
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, my family
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appreciate me when I do cooking on weekends.
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, my experience with your institute was great, and now after one month, I feel that I want classes for cake making
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my suggestion to you that, please
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new course to your list on weekends or evenings. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Your's faithfully Manpreet Singh

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The letter has a friendly tone, which suits the context of feedback.
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Your enthusiasm for cooking comes through, making the feedback engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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