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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart presents how far people travelled,
while
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 the bar chart illustrates the amount of
time
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 they took
for
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to
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 travel from 1995 to 2015.
Overall
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, both distance travelled and
time
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 taken increased from 1995 to 2005. The figures
then
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 rapidly dropped in 2010 and slightly decreased until 2015. In 1995, people travelled almost 7000
miles
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 per year with over 370
hours
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. Both numbers significantly grew, spending more than 380
hours
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 and travelling approximately 7200
miles
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 in the next five years.
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 the number of distance saw a moderate increase, remaining almost the same level at under 7200
miles
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, the amount of
time
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 taken sharply surged, peaking at around 387
hours
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 in 2005. After 2005, the popularity of travelling significantly went down. People travelled less than 6700
miles
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 and spent no more than 370
hours
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for
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travelling in 2010. The trend continued showing a marginal decline. The number of distance travelled dropped to under 6700
miles
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.
Similarly
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, the amount of
time
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 taken went down to under 370
hours
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 per year, making 2015 the least common in travelling.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, miles, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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