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Some people believe that planing for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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some people believe that planning for the
future
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 is
waste
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a waste
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 of
time
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 and assume that focusing on the present is a more beneficial way. I totally disagree with
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 mindset for two primary reasons which
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 discussed
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 thoroughly. First of all, one reason why planning for the
future
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 is not a waste of
time
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 is that it helps achieve long-term goals if plans are arranged properly.
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 can help individuals implement their present
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 in imploying all the opportunities they have
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 they use their current
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 wisely.
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, planning ahead makes controlling the present actions easier on career advancements, financial security, and personal development.
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, students who
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 in engineering jobs and areas of
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 and plan to
work
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 in those areas are able to focus better on current mathematic studies and better understand how to achieve their career and personal goals in the
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.
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 to achieving goals, planning and not solely focusing on the present prepares for unforeseen challenges and reduces stress. Undeniably, life is unpredictable and having
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 plans helps individuals navigate crises
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 as job loss, health issues and economic downturns.
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 scheduling especially for financial aspects brings more peace if someone is unable to
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 for some reason.
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, people who generally plan their budget just in case they cannot pursue
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 in
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 of illness overcame financial issues better during the lockdown period during the COVID-19 crisis. In conclusion,
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 some people believe planning for the
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 is
time
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-wasting and focusing solely on the present is more important , I strongly disagree with
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 statement because having pre-arranged plans is seriously more important since It provides individuals with better insight toward controlling present actions and preparing for unpredictable challenges in life.

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Task Achievement
Clarify the thesis statement to make your position clearer. Consider stating clearly in the introduction what your main points will be.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure all sentences flow logically and make clear connections between your ideas. Use linking words and phrases to enhance coherence.
Task Achievement
Try to provide more diverse examples or explanations to strengthen your arguments and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
Task Achievement
Your essay displays a clear stance against the idea that planning is a waste of time, which is an essential part of task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have structured your essay with clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific point, which helps in understanding your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • unexpected expenses
  • career advancement
  • long-term goals
  • structured approach
  • personal development
  • educational goals
  • fulfilling life
  • spontaneous experiences
  • emotional fulfillment
  • embrace opportunities
  • mental health
  • reduce stress and anxiety
  • mindfulness
  • balanced approach
  • flexibility and adaptation
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