IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The diagram gives information about the number of cars used in three different cities of the US by automobile type. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the number of cars used in three different cities of the US by automobile type. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure depicts the trend of different fields people have invested their
money
Use synonyms
 during
a
Change the article
an
show examples
 eight-year-old period from 2008 to 2015 in the UK.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is seen that the number of
money
Use synonyms
 invested in all different fields has approximately increased during these 8
years
Use synonyms
 with the wind
energy
Use synonyms
 investment having the most significant growth contrary to
energy
Use synonyms
 smart technology remained relatively stable with just a slight increase. In the first two
Use synonyms
years
Add a comma
years,
show examples
 the amount of
money
Use synonyms
 put into solar
energy
Use synonyms
 was zero,
although
Linking Words
 from 2010 it started almost a gradual rise to about 3 billion pounds. The amount of
money
Use synonyms
 provided for wind
energy
Use synonyms
 went under
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
considerable growth during the first 3
years
Use synonyms
 and
then
Linking Words
 experienced a sudden decrease to about one-third in 2011 and after that went up steadily until 2015. Investments in other fields,
on the other hand
Linking Words
, fluctuated slightly during the covered
years
Use synonyms
 with the
last
Linking Words
 year being almost as the initial amount.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words money, years, energy with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: