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The table shows the source material on which Hollywood movies were based from 1995 to 2013.

The table shows the source material on which Hollywood movies were based from 1995 to 2013.
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The table provides key information about the total gross, average gross, and
market
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share
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, for different types of
movies
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Overall
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, original screenplay
movies
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 are the most common.
In addition
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, it dominates in terms of total gross and
market
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,
while
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 films
such
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 as remakes, based on fact , and based on legend hold a lower
market
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.
In contrast
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, based on theme park ride
movies
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 have the highest average gross, followed by based on
books
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 and TV films. In terms of
market
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 and total gross, original screenplay
movies
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 hold almost half of the
market
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, accounting for 47.5%, and it has the highest total gross, based on
books
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 follow, contributing to 29.9%
market
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 and 49.2
million
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 total grosses. Meanwhile, based on facts and remakes, ranked after films inspired by
books
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, with 11.2 and 10.9
million
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,
also
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 it has a small
share
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 of the
market
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, contributing to 6.8% and 5.8%. based on TV has 5.3% and 8.8
million
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Movies
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 Based on legends or those inspired by theme park rides
,
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 have a very small contribution to the
market
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 and total gross.
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, original screenplays have the lowest average gross among the rest
movies
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 theme parks have the highest. Based on the
books
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 come in the second order, followed by those based on TV and facts, with 48.7 and 41.3
million
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, based on legends and remakes generated 36.4 and 40.1 average gross.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words market, share, movies, books, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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