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The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the

The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the
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The line graph illustrates the changes that took place in three unlike areas of violation in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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, burglary started at the highest point among
three
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the three
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 lines and
then
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 decreased
at the end
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 of the period.
While
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 robbery takes the lowest position for the entire phase and car theft remains stable across the timeline.
The burglary
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Burglary
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 was
alway
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always
 the highest in three lines, in 2003, it expanded about 500
incidents
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 to 2004. From 2004 to 2008, it had a
down trend
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downtrend
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 of about between 3400 and 1300 so it was
crashion
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crashing
crashed
. Between 2008 and 2012, the
bunglary
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burglary
burglar
 had small fluctuations but it maintained
in
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at
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 about 1400.
The car
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Car
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 theft rose to about 100
incidents
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 from 2003 to 2004 but in 2004, it began entering
down
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a downward
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 trend
to
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apply
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2006. From 2003 to 2005, the robbery grew
about
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by about
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 300
incidents
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 . Between 2006 and 2012, the car theft shot up from 2000 to 2600
incidents
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 and was similar to 2006. From 2005 to 2008, the robbery fell
about
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by about
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 800
incidents
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 and between 2008 and 2012, it shot up but was trivial to about 500 to 800
incidents
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shot" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
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